It is time for Friday Fictioneers already.
Eye on the horizon, Rochelle takes her passengers on a cruise over dark waters. Their boarding pass: A very short story, 100 words with a beginning, a middle and an end, based on the picture prompt. That’s it.
Clutching her 101 words, Emmy walks the plank.
Cruising
Jim, her late husband, invested early in Tar sands and made a fortune.
It doesn’t erase a lifetime of abuse but at least she doesn’t worry about money.
A year of sunrises on waterways with Sam is pure happiness.
God the man makes her laugh!
He is kind, patient, forgives her everything.
She adores him. They have no secrets.
Well, almost…
She fell again. The Thing in her brain is growing.
Inoperable…
She can’t be late this time.
As she climbs on the rail, a sharp shove hurls her over it.
Right on time she thinks hitting the icy water.
Terrific writing – a life in 100 words!
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I learned from the best.:-)
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Oh my goodness, so much evoked – a past, a love, a tone, a critical moment – wonderful.
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Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed that.
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It has everything, even a suicide!
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May be I could have written obits for a living!
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I tell you what, with that sort of mind you should be employed by a major Hollywood studio.
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Nah! I couldn’t take the pressure! Thank you though;
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Dear Emmy,
I’d never make anyone walk the plank for one word over. Fifty maybe, but never just one.
Our stories were on a similar wavelength this week, weren’t they? A lot of background implied in your multi-layered piece. Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I didn’t think you would 😉
Yes our stories did have a similar thread. Thank you for your praise Rochelle.
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Very well done.
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Thank you Sandra. Very kind of you to say so.
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A story told, and not a wasted word. Kind of like poetry, isn’t it?
rjb
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I am smiling wide. Yes, in a way it is.
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Wow, very intriguing. Great story!
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Thank you Jan. Glad you liked it.
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A mini-story at the speed of 100wpm and written with a beautiful precision. Great job, Emm !
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Thank you Paul. Speed of 100wpm… I like that! 🙂
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Sad to see her go but happy her last years were an improvement over her first ones.
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Thank you Dawn. She died happy.
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oh dear!
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Yup.
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I like your little drama Emm . I tried to tell you but for some reason I am unable to comment on your page …it’s a glitch to be fixed …hope this gets to you…Tony Date: Thu, 28 Nov 2013 12:24:33 +0000 To: komtack@hotmail.com
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Thanks for the heads up Tony. I have no idea what happened 😦
But you made it to the blog after all; thank you for your persistance, it’s much appreciated.
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Dear Emmy,
Wonderful and happy, despite, and perhaps because, of the ending. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you Doug. I am glad you like it and thank you for taking the time to comment.
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Well,someone made it easy for her to take that plunge-but am curious as to who? ;-)A great tale:-)
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Ah that is the fun part of FF! You get to finish the story or fill in the blanks anyway you like!
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Ha!ha!So true!
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